Poetry

some seem stuck

After all the pain
we inflicted in ourselves
though some are assumed
we are still both passengers
in the idea of us.

P.S. I had a hard time with the last line of this tanka poem so I wanna share some alternate versions (where I get the title) you might like:

seemingly stuck here on Earth.
who seem stuck with each other.

Read it again and tell me what you like more!

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2 thoughts on “some seem stuck

  1. The last line in the tanka right now was actually the last one I thought of and it was like a eureka moment lol. And you’re right, only now did I notice that the title actually gives meaning into the poem without giving away too much, which could be the case had I used one of the alternate versions. Thank you!

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